“Comments”
I think you should make the steampunk bit punchier. Then introduce Ellie and why finding her cousin’s killer matters. And then tell who Bennett is–as written, I have no clue what’s so important about him, why he would know the killer, and especially how his and Ellie’s paths would cross. Otherwise, this sounds really interesting!
Wow, thanks, Evangeline. I appreciate the feedback. In fact, I chatted with my crit partner about it and we actually brainstormed some great ideas for the book.
You rock!




